Good sunday everyone! 🙂 Life has been hectic yet again – but I didn’t want to miss sss! So here is another excerpt from my novella about the Minotaur (first draft). The Satyr has planted a doubt in Theseus’ head: is his father Aegeus, like he’d always thought, or Poseidon, a god? He hasn’t seen his mother in some time, but now he goes to her, to satisfy his curiosity.
“Theseus.” Her voice, so familiar, low and rich, brought an ache to his heart that he’d forgotten. A sharp breath tore through his lungs. He’d missed her.
What a bad idea this was. “Listen, I won’t stay long.” Questions wanted to pour from his lips – how have you been, have you missed me too? – but he kept them down with an effort.
I am guilty of giving you more than 6 sentences again (7) – I hope you’ll find it in your heart to forgive me. 🙂
I won’t be online on sunday, but on monday I will check out the others’ posts.
Happy sunday all!
Ah, so bittersweet. Love how he misses her, yet blurbs right away he won’t stay long.
Awe, sweet description. Nice job. 🙂
Good job!
I agree, bittersweet and tender. Great work. And I don’t mind a little extra! 🙂
Very evocative, showing his character and desires.
Great six!
Very touching and emotional. I loved it.
A very vivid portrait of the relationship. Even gods have family problems…
Seems almost sad that he has to keep those feelings hidden. A wonderful excerpt!
Bittersweet six! Great job!
Great seven, Chrys! As always… 😀
Poignant six–good job.
Really good scene. Theseus’s thoughts tell us so much about his relationship with his mother.
Here are my six: Sandy’s Six
Love how, through his internal thought, you let us know what he really wants to know.
I like how this really makes me empathize with Theseus.
tugged at my heart