Six Sentence Sunday has come around again! 🙂 I am very excited about participating in this fun project. So today I am posting six sentences – in fact the six opening sentences – from my short sci-fi novel Dakru (unpublished, under revision).
In the world of Dakru, where the all-women Gultur race rules, Elei must find out why he is hunted if he wants to remain alive.
Blood seeped through Elei’s fingers. He pressed them harder against the wound down his side, over his hip, gritting his teeth. The pulse of his heart leaped under his palm. He sat on a hard bench and waited for gods knew what. In his blurry eyes, everything had a shimmering edge, suspended between reality and dream.
Then the world tilted.
Danger.
I hope to start submitting Dakru in the next months.
Is is sunday again already? I meant to join. This sounds like fun. Maybe next week. 🙂 I like your opening lines!
Thanks! Hope to see you on SSS next week then! 🙂
No question, a fantastic opening. Love how you show him on the verge of passing out, and what a show of pain. I must know why he’s being hunted. Hurry and get this one published please!
Wonderful opening six! I can’t wait to read more.
Thank you, Arlene and Sarah!
Wonderful surreal feel to this. His pain and confusion is well portrayed and the “everything had a shimmering edge” is a great visual description.
What an intriguing excerpt. I’d love to read more!
Thank you, Laurie!
The pain and confusion are evident. Very nice “6”
Very nice! Hope to see more of him next week.
Ooooo – another sci fi/fantasy writer! Woo hoo! And I love your post! Great visual – I felt his frustration!
Nice and intriguing!
Thank you all! *waves at laurijowen* Hi sci-fi/fantasy author! Pleased to meet you! 🙂
Great 6 to pull me in. Thanks, I’ll stop back for more.
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Love the visual details of the world shimmering, between reality and dream.
Fascinating. Good luck.
Wonderfully done. I want to know how he got hurt.
Those are the opening sentences? Great hook. Way to suck the reader in!
Good luck with it!
Wahoo! Great lines! Love seeing your posts.
Well now, he’s in an even more dangerous spot than my heroine is with blood spilling out of him.
Love the six, I want to know what happens next.
Definitely want to find out what’s going on with Elei.
You caught my attention! A great opening six! I look forward to reading more. 🙂
Definitely want to know what happens next. He has to survive, right?
Oh, poor guy! 🙁
great start, keep going!
His physical anguish and pain shine through! Well done!
Love the intensity!
Thank you everyone for the encouraging words! It means a lot to me. 🙂