Happy Sunday to all! 🙂
This was a long weekend in Cyprus (Friday April 1st was a national holiday), so I have had more time for writing, which is great.
For this week’s post, I chose the opening lines of my short fantasy story “Indra’s Return” which you can read in the Spring (current) issue of Mirror Dance magazine.
Since it is the beginning of the story, I leave you to it, and will post another few lines from it next week.
Beyond the sea of Bara lay the land of exiles – human and troll cities, merchant harbors, thieves and whores. I was supposed to be there, leading a life of nostalgia and pain, languishing in Queen Syrana’s memory.
Dying inside.
But here I stood, well within the forbidden borders – forbidden only to me – of the human-elf coalition, polishing the tables of this accursed inn with a wet rag, and glaring at the hooded human about to grab my hip – again.
I slapped his hand away, and struggled not to punch him. That would be a man’s reaction, not a woman’s, and I had to keep my disguise. “Did you want something?”
I hope you like this story. For more great snippets, don’t forget to visit the sss site!
Oh I do so love your writing. So eloquent
Dying inside….what a powerful couple of words. Awesome opening. Who wouldnt read on to find out why this elf? is posing as a waitress and so unhappy.
Great mix of poignant longing and feistiness. Love your lyrical wording, and the setting too. Congrats on its publication!
I loved this story and the rich tapestry of description that you weave!
Very nice. You’ve a great voice. The description, her reaction, all have drawn me into this. Yes, I want to read more of it.
What a great way to start a book. I most definitely want to read more. Fabulous!
Great opening! You hooked me, I want to read more.
oh, great first lines…sets the scene up nicely, and great descriptive writing. Consider me hooked in, and left wanting more 🙂
Love the exotic setting, teeming with danger, and your very intriguing character. A wonderful opening. I’ll definitely read the rest of the story.
Great opening.
I will definitely keep reading, great opener!
Wonderful visual imagery and a main character already endearing. Great six! I will watch for more. 🙂
“Dying inside” gives a good glimpse into character and why they are here and not there.
Very intriguing. 🙂
Well if that’s the outcome, I’m hoping he might consider doing whatever he has to do. Great tease and very intriguing.